Week 4 Story:
I used the story Dasharatha's Karma as the base of the story. I simply reinterpreted it as a rhyme.
There once was a young boy who liked to hunt
he used his arrows that were not blunt.
This boy was special for he was the king
unknowing what his actions would bring
Into the jungle, he often ventured
For here he normally adventured.
One day while in the forest he heard a rustle
and he knew that he could not bustle,
For he knew an animal was at the stream
and what happened next felt like a dream.
He shot his arrow blindly at the unknown creature
and when he came closer he could not believe its feature.
For it was not some animal but a young boy
and he knew what he had to do next would not bring him any joy.
Before he even saw him he knew something was wrong
because he heard a terrible cry that was long.
The news of this tragedy the king must tell
he knew that his parents would not take it well
It was worse than he expected when he arrived
for the gift of sight they are deprived
They hung to life thanks to their son
but now that he is gone they know they are done
The king led them to the lifeless body for one last embrace
the blind parents thought the king was a disgrace.
The parents screamed of heartbreak
for this amount of sorrow they could not take
They could not help but be in disbelief
the only thing that the poor couple could feel is grief.
The father pleaded for the king to slay him as he did his only child
for when he thought of life without his son he reviled.
The blind man stated that the king will know his sorrow not yet
but one day, one of his sons will be taken for his debt.
The body of their son they set ablaze
and they joined the dancing flames without delay
I used the story Dasharatha's Karma as the base of the story. I simply reinterpreted it as a rhyme.
he used his arrows that were not blunt.
This boy was special for he was the king
unknowing what his actions would bring
Into the jungle, he often ventured
For here he normally adventured.
One day while in the forest he heard a rustle
and he knew that he could not bustle,
For he knew an animal was at the stream
and what happened next felt like a dream.
He shot his arrow blindly at the unknown creature
and when he came closer he could not believe its feature.
For it was not some animal but a young boy
and he knew what he had to do next would not bring him any joy.
Before he even saw him he knew something was wrong
because he heard a terrible cry that was long.
The news of this tragedy the king must tell
he knew that his parents would not take it well
It was worse than he expected when he arrived
for the gift of sight they are deprived
They hung to life thanks to their son
but now that he is gone they know they are done
The king led them to the lifeless body for one last embrace
the blind parents thought the king was a disgrace.
The parents screamed of heartbreak
for this amount of sorrow they could not take
They could not help but be in disbelief
the only thing that the poor couple could feel is grief.
The father pleaded for the king to slay him as he did his only child
for when he thought of life without his son he reviled.
The blind man stated that the king will know his sorrow not yet
but one day, one of his sons will be taken for his debt.
The body of their son they set ablaze
and they joined the dancing flames without delay
Hi Brittany,
ReplyDeleteWow, I really enjoyed your interpretation of this story. You really captured the rhymes of the other stories in the Ramayana as well as the grief of the parents in the story. I have never been blessed with the ability to rhyme so I really appreciate people who can do it really well.
I understand that the young king was out to hunt, but it also makes me wonder why he was so quick to shoot blind into the woods. I know that mistake was a major part of the story, but to me it seems the story doesn't point much to the king as being someone who would make a mistake like that.
The part at the end when the king was telling the boy's family was a little confusing. Maybe in your next story, if there's a part that is a little confusing that doesn't seem very essential, you could consider taking that part out.
Brittany, this is the first story I've read from a fellow student that wasn't in plain prose, and you nailed it! I've been enjoying reading the poem versions of stories in the PDE Ramayana, and this was just as good as those! I've bookmarked this page and your intro so I can hopefully see more of these in the future! Break the norm, keep writing in these different ways, I love it!
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