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Week 6 Story: My Hunger is Unsatisfied

My Hunger is Unsatisfied:


I always wore my chastity with pride.
This all changed when I became a bride.

The consummation of my marriage changed me so much.
I had an awakening with his touch

I guess in the beginning I came off to strong.
I think maybe the wait was too long.

I was not my husband first.
I feel like this may have been a curse.

My husband decided that his sexual hunger was quenched.
This is bad news because I am always drenched.

What is a girl to do? When she has been left all alone?
And a husband who no longer wants to bone...

I loathe the idea of parting!
Our fire was just starting!

I protest this insanity!
He must have NO humanity!

My craving for flesh is not satisfied.
Actually, they are ever amplified!

There is no tragedy parallel to what I'm facing. 
I don't have my man that I am used to embracing.

So, now I am single.
I am left to mingle.

But, I want a man NOW!
I am about to have a cow.

I decided to pray to fulfill my severe need.
I crossed my fingers God could have some speed.

I prayed to God:
""Give me a husband,
 give me a husband, 
give me a husband, 
give me a husband, 
give me a husband."

The next day to my amazement five brothers wanted my hand.
I could not help but think to myself, "How grand!"

With five husbands I can be content.
This is a one eighty that I have under-went.

Now, all of my needs are met.
I have no reason to fret.

For five husbands keep me very busy,
And if I’m honest a little dizzy.

But, I am loving my new life.
I know that I am the best wife


 Authors Note:
This was inspired by The Story of Nalayani by V. Venkatachellam. I thought it would be fun to switch it up and do it in the first person. I was going for funny. I really hope it came across that way. I read the original story and thought that there was potential for it to be retold where you could feel bad for her but also have a laugh.
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  1. GrayceFebruary 21, 2020 at 11:54 AM

    Yes! Your goal of making the story funny was a success! I really enjoyed it! Now I need to read the original story. There are a ton of stories about men needing wives/lots of sex, but hardly any about women needing husbands/sex. This made the story really fun. I also enjoyed your rhyming and the style you chose. It worked out really well. The only thing I would change would be the font. It's kinda small and hard to see with the white background, maybe if you made the font thicker/bold it would be easier to read. Thanks for the fun story!

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  2. Reid HarringtonFebruary 23, 2020 at 10:31 PM

    You nailed making this a fun read! I'm always a little skeptical about stories in poem style, but I think that it just amplified the comedy in this one! After reading the story in the Mahabharata, this was an awesome way to tell about some of Nalayani's backstory. I hope you can keep it up with the comedic poems, because this was a very fun read.

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  3. Alana RoseFebruary 24, 2020 at 10:55 AM

    Hi Brittany! I loved both the effort you put into making such a long poem, and also all the little sexual innuendos you threw in there! It was definitely funny, and so few stories are actually from the woman's point of view. The meme REALLY topped things off, and set the tone for the poem! Great work!

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