The Hypocritical Cat:
Once Upon a Time….
There was a pack of rats by a river.
Also, there was a cat that gave them a shiver.
The rats lived in holes.
Not to be eaten was their goals.
As a pack, they went to and fro.
The inside the cat tummy the cat wanted to show.
But the cat knew the number of rats was a great deal.
The full force of the collective he did not want to feel.
So, this cunning cat devised a plan.
To greatly shorten the rats’ lifespan.
The cat would spend his day facing the sun.
And of his feet, he only stood on one.
The rats’ attention the cat managed to attract.
The rats knew this was no way for a cat to act.
The rats could not help but ask about this peculiar
behavior.
The cat could only think of the rats’ flavor he would
savior.
The rats asked, “Why do you stand on one leg with your mouth
open wide?”
The cat answered with a lie to misguide.
The cat stated, “because I worship the sun.”
The cat only thought the rats trust he had won.
The rats began to bow to the “pious” cat one by one.
The cat couldn’t believe the success of the lie he spun.
For the last in the line was not so lucky.
They ended up in a place that is mucky.
The cat would snatch them by the tail and gobble them up.
They didn’t know they shouldn’t have been last in the lineup.
They didn’t know they shouldn’t have been last in the lineup.
Things continued until the chief rat noticed his pack
growing smaller.
He knew that he best not make to big a holler
So, the next day when the lined up to make their daily bow.
The rats were going to make sure the cat had his last meow.
All at once they sprung for the cat's throat and their sharp
teeth broke the skin.
Time for a true blood bath to begin.
So, the rats munched and crunched until the cat was only
bone.
The true strength of a pack was surely shown.
The Hypocritical Cat: W. H. D. Rouse
Author's Note: I just went pretty consistent with the original story. This story was pretty easy to write compared to the others. It was easier because I really like the story and I was lucky that the words that were popping in my head were easily rhymable.
Hi Brittany!
ReplyDeleteFirst off, I would like to comment about the simplicity of your layout of the blog. It's quick and easy to navigate, and I think this sort of ease should help readers when they are trying to find the stories that they want to read or to refer back to! In terms of the story itself, I applaud you in your efforts of using couplets in your story. This is something that can be rather difficult to do, and I've only tried it once on my blog! It's nervy, but very fun! I do wonder though, what if you included more pictures in your story that would allow for the readers to visualize the plot with better context? I feel like such an addition would add on to the fun that you are trying to emphasize in your story. Overall, good work on the creativity of the format of your story and I look forward to reading more from you soon!
Hiya Brittany, I really like being able to take a break from the prose and read more stories like this. I think you did a great job keeping it simple while also getting plenty of info across to the reader. I couldn't imagine trying to come up with that many rhymes! I hope you keep it up with these poems so I can keep coming back!
ReplyDeleteHey Brittany! Great job in this story. I am always impressed when I read people's stories and they have managed to take their reader on a journey and also rhyme throughout their writing. I have never even attempted this...incredible job! I think the story turned out great. The cat ended up taking a bigger bite than he could chew...I guess the rats got their revenge. I like how the idea of the rat's teamwork and working as a pack overcame their mortal enemy. Keep up the good work!
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